Flintoast
Newbie
That sounds really nice. Solid idea.
Kick sounds good, snare punches nicely, hi hats and percussion are cool.
Now the 808 feels like it doesn't fit here, as the beat is kinda slow tempo and the 808s are short and coming at you pretty fast. Another thing is that it feels like the sort of keys sample/sound that loops throughout the song is taking up most of the space, clashing with the 808 on the lower end.
The thing I feel the most is that it lacks progression and variation. My take is that the beat shouldn't need lyrics to give it a context and anything interesting, that's why I advise to kinda break the loop on purpose and try incorporate new elements or give the ones you already have a twist - make the beat tell a story as well.
Send me some more stuff I'd love to hear it!
Also would love some feedback on my beat