shaolindisciple
ILLIEN
exclusive track dropping in the near future entitled 9 ring bloody broadswords featuring killah priest prod bleeding face
golden swords & killah priest new music coming soon
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shaolindisciple
ILLIEN
just dropped it here it is
Bro, Im not trying to be a hater or anything, just being honest and I'm trying to be constructive.
The beat is dope, I like it a lot BUT..
Is Killah Priest reading his words from his phone? Not a good look, reminds me of Canibus pulling his notebook out during the battle with Dizaster, not the sort of thing you record and put to video.
And where is the rhyme scheme in Golden Swords lyrics?
Are you Golden Swords?
The timing of the delivery doesn't work for me and the lack of the rhymes is off putting for me personally.
If the delivery was timed really well you could get away with some lack of rhyming but IMO rap needs to rhyme even if its a basic rhyme scheme.
Keep grinding bro, no hate, but its not for me in its current form.
Keep practicing, doing your drills and you will only get more refined, the moves will come out without thinking about it.
The beat is dope, I like it a lot BUT..
Is Killah Priest reading his words from his phone? Not a good look, reminds me of Canibus pulling his notebook out during the battle with Dizaster, not the sort of thing you record and put to video.
And where is the rhyme scheme in Golden Swords lyrics?
Are you Golden Swords?
The timing of the delivery doesn't work for me and the lack of the rhymes is off putting for me personally.
If the delivery was timed really well you could get away with some lack of rhyming but IMO rap needs to rhyme even if its a basic rhyme scheme.
Keep grinding bro, no hate, but its not for me in its current form.
Keep practicing, doing your drills and you will only get more refined, the moves will come out without thinking about it.
shaolindisciple
ILLIEN
peace appreciate the reply and what you was saying i can only speak for my self so yea my style is off beat but the jewel is in what am saying and my rhymes are far from basic a lot of cats be on point with rhyming on the beat but what they actually saying its all love just saying peace
You do you bro, I never said your rhymes were basic, I said there were no rhymes, except for maybe 1 or 2 that I could make out and one of them was Killah rhyming off of you. I listened a few times just in case I was missing something. Like I said, no hate, you are either open to constructive criticism or not, it feels to me like you are not.
Keep grinding, its just not for me.
Keep grinding, its just not for me.
shaolindisciple
ILLIEN
no its all good my music ant for every body and i fully understand it all comes down to what you like and peoples taste in music much love i respect your opinion much love peace