I like this, did you compose it? Mix really doesn't sound that bad to me at all. The only thing that sounds a bit off to me is the kick roll that happens from time to time. The track could possibly be a bit brighter in the mids to highs, to balance it out a little more. Nice work, nice variation, Ive listened twice and at no point did it get boring. The little pauses are a nice touch too. Sounds pretty similar to some of the things I've composed. Also, welcome to illmuzik, I haven't seen you here before.
Re: My track, the theme for this beat was "Crime/Robbery" so the robbery/car chase samples are to reflect that and make it fit the theme. I tried to keep them mostly to the intro and the "hook" section, with more sporadic and carefully placed car chase ones on the second verse. I still tried to leave space for an emcee, just not on the intro or "hook" section. My plan in my head was a first verse about going preparing for and then going to the robbery, the hook is the robbery and the second verse is about getting away, but ending up getting shot, crashing, and dying at the end lol.
@DJ Excellence Sounds like it could be a bit brighter in the mids and high end. Will make it sound a lot clearer, make the vocals pop and overall not so low end oriented.